Spaans dwarf shore pine styling help

Phillthy · Jul 31, 2017

I finished wiring/styling this pine tree. This is probably the first styling I am very proud of. I am unsure on what to do with the left side of the tree. Do I cut it off? Do I use it as part of the design? Creating jins/deadwood is an option but I want to know what y'all think.

The photo outside is what it looked like before. The photo inside is after.

Giga · Jul 31, 2017

Looks like your off to a good start - for me personally, I would jin that left branch and I would also move the bottom most branch to the right a bit so the motion of the tree flows to the right. The pads also need a bit of work but this is a very good first start. Granted this is only what I can see from the pictures - you may want to take pics from all side to see if that's the best front, and we can get a better pictures of the overall tree.

EDIT: I just notice that you have a bunch of branches coming of the top whorl - It's looks like you addressed this but I can't tell. Just something to keep your eye on

Phillthy · Jul 31, 2017

Here are some more

Leo in N E Illinois · Jul 31, 2017

Nice first attempt, you've been a member here only 18 months, and I'm assuming you have not been doing bonsai a lot longer than that. You should be proud of your styling. But there's always something to improve.

You may have done enough for this year, so consider my thoughts for down the road.

The first branch and trunk are heading to the right. I would keep the branch to the left, but eventually shorten it to somewhere about two thirds of the length of the first branch. It needs to be visually shorter than the first branch. Keeping the branch will give some counterbalance, and keeping it shorter will keep movement flowing to the right. It could also work at one third the length of the first one.

Wait a year before shortening.

Leo in N E Illinois · Jul 31, 2017

The apex looks awkward, but I'd need to see it in person to discuss what to do.

Phillthy · Jul 31, 2017

Leo in N E Illinois said:
Nice first attempt, you've been a member here only 18 months, and I'm assuming you have not been doing bonsai a lot longer than that. You should be proud of your styling. But there's always something to improve.

You may have done enough for this year, so consider my thoughts for down the road.

The first branch and trunk are heading to the right. I would keep the branch to the left, but eventually shorten it to somewhere about two thirds of the length of the first branch. It needs to be visually shorter than the first branch. Keeping the branch will give some counterbalance, and keeping it shorter will keep movement flowing to the right. It could also work at one third the length of the first one.

Wait a year before shortening.

thank you, youre correct ive been doing bonsai ever since i joined this forum. being only 23, i hope to continue this hobby for a lifetime. i will keep your advice in mind moving foward. i dont want to do too much to stress it out and potentially kill the tree. & yes the apex does look awkward, creating an apex for pines is always difficult for me

petegreg · Jul 31, 2017

Phillthy said:
...& yes the apex does look awkward, creating an apex for pines is always difficult for me

I do not know what others will say, but have you seen this?

http://www.bonsai4me.com/AdvTech/ATapexbuilding.htm

Phillthy · Jul 31, 2017

petegreg said:
I do not know what others will say, but have you seen this?

http://www.bonsai4me.com/AdvTech/ATapexbuilding.htm

Wow there is a god. Thank you for this

sorce · Jul 31, 2017

Nice.

Time and more good work will figure out that left branch.

Real nice!

Sorce

Leo in N E Illinois · Aug 1, 2017

I just read the Bonsai 4Me article on apexes. It's a bit vague, but largely true. Your apex needs to be lighter and finer than the lowest part of the tree, so you can wait and develop it later, by a couple years if need be. Don't rush into it and butcher it up.

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