The trick to a great crown is that it should be organized without looking organized.
I think you have improved it greatly because the rows were softened... and you fixed the apex quite nicely.
Daniel teaches one very simple thought on this, and frankly it always works... style every branch as if it is a crown, and it will all come together to form a cohesive image. Applying the pricipal of gnarly, undulating branches of course....
I have to run off to work... so I'll have to dig up some example photos later....
Kindest regards,
Victrinia